Title: [FF] Rozen Maiden Vollständige
Description: I don't speak German, leave me alone.
AKC - April 29, 2008 12:36 AM (GMT)
I'm posting this as sort of a test, I guess. I'm not done with chapter one, but I need some input and opinions to see if I'm even going in a remotely sensible direction.
As a side-note, drawing is my strong point and I really have to struggle to write something decent. Hence the lack of description, choppy paragraphs, etc etc...
Just for future reference, it’s too tedious to include the “desu”s, “na no”s, “kashira”s, and “da wa”s all the time, and I know you all know that they say it, but for the sake of dialogue flow, I will not be including these in this story. I apologize.
As for the canonicity of this, I’m just hoping to answer all the questions that were left open in the anime, and therefore am not following (but may use some aspects of) the manga. Think of this as a fanmade “season three”, if you will.
And yes. There will be eventual humanized Shinku. =[ Is that totally overdone or what? I dunno, I haven't read a lot of RM fanfiction, but I get the feeling it probably is. Don't worry, it'll have a reason, I promise...
Blah blah blah, I'm babbling... please enjoy. @_@;;;
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She smiled as a familiar face looked upon her. A kind hand gently stroked her cheek as he spoke to her in a way that was beyond the limitation of words.
“I am...? I can...?” she interjected these phrases as his mouth continued to move. But finally, she took comfort in what he told her. She lovingly gripped his hand before it faded into the darkness. “Father...”
And then someone else’s voice called out to her. “Shinku... Shinku...!”
“Jun...” Another face gazed at her. This was another face that she loved dearly... With him by her side, she could...
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Deep in an enclosed area of the N-Field, two figures faced each other. The taller one was a rabbit with a humanoid figure and a stately, black tuxedo. The smaller was like snow; soft, light, and perfectly white. She looked up at the rabbit with the face of a young child. They were surrounded by nothing but darkness and doors.
Laplace’s Demon presented two glowing lights to Kirakishou.
“Rosa Mysticae...” the girl stared curiously through one golden eye.
“Correct.” His rich, thoughtful voice flowed without pause; his whiskers remained perfectly still as he talked. “Regrettably, these already have owners... Souseiseki was defeated by Suigintou, and Hina-Ichigo by Shinku...”
As if in response, the Rosa Mysticae sparkled more brilliantly. They wafted away from his gloved hands in order to return to their owners’ bodies. They resembled birds being freed from their cages.
“Because you are a newly born child, I will explain how the Game is played. However...” He smiled in a way that was neither kind nor happy. “There are many alternative ways to play... Some of the Players have decided to take different paths. Some do not wish to fight...”
The girl hovering daintily in the air gave a knowing nod. “Yes...”
“Those Rosa Mysticae I have shown you are what keep each Participant in the Game. However, one of the girls has fallen...”
“Hina-Ichigo. Father cut her link.”
“Very good. I see he told you more than I thought.” Laplace’s Demon’s elongated, furry ears twitched in thought. “Because she had already lost her Rosa Mystica and no longer has the desire to win, she is but an empty shell.”
At that final word, the girl listening grinned. Underneath her white lips were ever whiter teeth. “That shell... I will be taking it.”
The rabbit’s eyes narrowed. “Good. Begin the true Alice Game. I’ll be observing from the sidelines this time...”
He dawned his top hat and regally tapped his cane against an unseen floor. As if they had been visiting, he gave a deep bow, uttering the words, “Stay well.”
With that, Kirakishou fingered the rose that was her right eye. “Hina-Ichigo... I’m coming for you...”
She giggled softly.
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Shinku glared with silent impatience. “Jun! My tea is cold! Prepare a new cup for me!”
“Why the heck do I have to do it?” a boy with black hair complained angrily from the kitchen.
“As my servant, you—”
“Enough of this ‘servant’ nonsense!! It’s always, servant this, servant that... You evil, cursed doll!”
“What was that?!”
The two threw insults and arguments back and forth as Jun stormed into the family room. The doll with dichromatic eyes sighed and tried her best to drown the noise out. “You two are always such trouble...!”
In other words, it was an extraordinarily average day in the Sakurada household.
Suiseiseki sat with a sigh on the couch and watched indifferently as Shinku and Jun argued. It was weird, but she was quite jealous of Shinku at the moment. When Shinku argued with Jun, Jun was so half-hearted in his shouts and though no one else noticed, Suiseiseki’s observant eyes knew that their bickering had the effect of making him happy. Maybe it was all in her head, but it never felt that way when she argued with him. Every “you voodoo doll” and “annoying, selfish brat!” felt very sincere to her.
Just for good measures, she sighed again. After a few minutes, the fifth doll and her medium seemed to have fizzled out, and the latter retreated back to the kitchen, probably to fetch the tea that had sparked the argument.
Souseiseki, I miss you so much... Suiseiseki ran a hand through her ‘deceased’ twin’s hair. You always understood Suiseiseki’s feelings and knew how to make everything better...
This spot on the chair... Wait, something was missing. The spot next to Souseiseki was empty... Suiseiseki’s heart skipped a beat as she suddenly realized what was wrong, and she gasped, “Wh... where is Chibi-Ichigo’s body?!”
Shinku cast an alarmed glance at her sister. “What??”
Suiseiseki shrieked as she caught a glimpse of something thin and long slither quickly across the floor and disappear. At first, she thought it was a snake, but then... “Was that... a rose vine?!”
Jun re-entered the room with a cup of tea in his hands. “What’s going on?”
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Why... are you taking my body...
Kirakishou heard a small voice at the back of her head as she poured her consciousness into her new shell.
I wanted... to be by everyone’s side... Please don’t hurt them...
“I need this to become... the perfect girl,” Kirakishou explained neutrally.
Alice Game...? Are you my little sister?
“Yes, that’s right. But I’m not going to use the Alice Game. Not yet, anyway. I have a much more ingenius plan than fighting...” The seventh doll smiled wickedly. Her form was solidified, and its previous owner’s voice faded away. “Rest peacefully in your world for the time being, Hina-Ichigo-oneesama.”
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The next part has to do with Suigintou and Megu. And after that I need to find some way to make Kana useful.
I hope you liked it ^^;;;;
Tasogare - April 29, 2008 09:40 PM (GMT)
Hey, yur not bad. :) Lack of description? I think it's fine.
AKC - April 29, 2008 09:51 PM (GMT)
Ahhh, thank you very much~. >u<
Merines Shinku - May 6, 2008 10:00 AM (GMT)
You know what, you are a good fanfiction writer
AKC - May 6, 2008 10:21 PM (GMT)
Ah, thank you very much! >U<
Merines Shinku - May 8, 2008 09:45 AM (GMT)
When's the next chappie coming up?
I see this have JunxShinku pairing here... ngehehehehehe*evil grin*
AKC - May 9, 2008 03:27 AM (GMT)
There will absolutely be JunxShinku fluff. Kekekeke. I'm working on the next part right now, so it'll be done soon!
AKC - May 10, 2008 03:43 AM (GMT)
EDIT: Here we go! This is the whole chapter one (there's more stuff in there with Swiggy and Megu and stuff.)
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247034/1/Vollst_ndige
AKC - May 13, 2008 02:19 AM (GMT)
Merines Shinku - May 18, 2008 12:06 PM (GMT)
Hello FLUFF~!!!!!
Will there be moar fluffs AKC???
AKC - May 18, 2008 03:58 PM (GMT)
Teeheehee, probably. >:33
Merines Shinku - May 22, 2008 10:34 AM (GMT)
Chapter 3 needs moar fluffs~! But good going, execpt the canceling contract part!!!!! Why? Why? Why?
kokoa - May 22, 2008 11:04 AM (GMT)
I liked this chapter. Keep writing, this story has potential. POTENTIAL I TELL YOU!
AKC - May 22, 2008 10:17 PM (GMT)
Thank youuuu~~~!!! Things might get either better or worse for Swiggy, I haven't figured everything out yet, LOL. Thanks for the great feedback!
AKC - July 16, 2008 02:15 AM (GMT)
Merines Shinku - July 17, 2008 09:55 AM (GMT)
Onsen wa saikou~!
MOAR FLUFFS~!
Kira is nuts I tell ya, NUTS!
Great story development AKC!
AKC - July 18, 2008 04:23 AM (GMT)
Delight - August 16, 2008 02:27 AM (GMT)
Great story :D . I can't wait to read more.
Also, Shinku and Jun make a great "pair" XD .
Cafechan - August 27, 2008 12:46 AM (GMT)
Ooh, thanks! It's been a while since I've updated. I need to get back to work...
Merines Shinku - August 27, 2008 04:04 PM (GMT)
Yessshu
Update needed here! ^^
Cafechan - September 7, 2008 12:28 AM (GMT)
I just got a little stuck, so I'm writing a semi-fluffy oneshot about Jun and Shinku to get back into the groove of writing. xD